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HELL IS LIKE THIS, Part I by ulyferal [MA - 18+]
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Feral is kidnaped and raped.  His life will never be the same again.  This will be a series of stories concerning the saga of Feral and T-Bone plus dimensional travel will be involved in Parts II and III.

Categories: Swat Kats; Characters: Ensemble; Genres: Slash
Warnings: Adult Situations, Angst, AU, Complete, Dark Themes, Explicit Sexual Situations, Forced Conception, Graphic Birth, Hermaphrodite, Infant Death, m/m, Rape, Violence
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 40694; Read Count: 7922; Completed: Yes
Updated: 12/18/2010; Published: 12/14/2010
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Reviewer: ulyferal (Signed)
12/18/2010

And I'm in the process of editing as we speak. LOL  I just feel I could have done this better and tightened it up now that I've learned so much in writing since I first put it to paper.  Same way I feel about Beyond the Shadow of the Moon. 

Sometimes the changes are very noticeable to those who have read it already, others, you'd never know I'd done anything, but I'll feel more accomplished when I do this.

Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Hell Begins
The Children of Demons by Jay [MA - 18+]
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We all want to know just why Anita is so powerful, don't we? This is the answer I came up with.
Categories: Anita Blake Series; Characters: Anita/asher (sub), Anita/damian (sub), Asher (dom)/jean-claude (sub), Ensemble; Genres: Slash
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Blood, Bondage, Brain-Insane, D/S, Dark Themes, m/f, m/m, WIP
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents Series: None
Word count: 56288; Read Count: 1192; Completed: No
Updated: 03/20/2011; Published: 03/20/2011
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Reviewer: ulyferal (Signed)
04/09/2011

You have unintentionally failed to finish this chapter.  Take a look at the last line......it's hanging incomplete. 

 

I am enjoying your story. It's certainly a different twist.

Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Reviewer: ulyferal (Signed)
04/09/2011

It was confusing at first until you get further in the chapter to learn it was now 300 years later.  To me, this should have been earlier to bridge the two chapters better but that's just my opinion.

You made a small error here: ... that Caleb only join us on full moons,.... you meant it to be Caspian, I'm sure.

Chapter 2: Chapter 2