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Real name: Aoi Nikko
Member Since: 01/10/10
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Hello, I am a lover of Kingdom Hearts, Naruto and Harry Potter fanfiction. I actually read a lot of other fandoms, but so far those are my main ones. I am converted usually by a good author, and I am friendly, and like making friends.
 
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Holding On by Keikokin (NC-17) star star star star [ - ]


Lucius is a Veela who's time is running out, for the second time!

Categories: Harry/Lucius
Characters:
Genres: First Time
Warnings: Alternate Universe

Series: None
Chapters: 27
Wordcount: 57711 - Hits: 55650
Complete?: Yes - Published: 03/01/06 - Last Updated: 28/01/06
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Reviewer: Aoi Nikko - Signed
Date: 01/10/10 (Chapter 1: 1)

Hmm, interesting, and you indeed caught my interest, but I find this opening a bit rushed. You're good at telling the story and keeping it moving, but you aren't using descriptions to make the story breathe. It is really hard to do, though, and all writers constantly struggle(especially me), so don't think I'm bashing you. But still, I like the idea so far!

Author's Response:

Glad that you enjoyed it, sorry it wasn't up to your expectations on the descriptions.

-Keikokin