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From: gloriana
Date: 08/21/2008 |
And this line here:
I decide that I have to clear this up with streak-free Windex. I want birds smacking themselves into us, we're so clear.
That is a gorgeous line - I'd give whole stories for a line like that :)
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From: Nadine
Date: 11/15/2006 |
Lovely. Looking forward to more stories, beta or no beta.
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From: Berty (bertybertle@yahoo.co.uk)
Date: 10/27/2006 |
This has a lovely, peaceful feeling to it that makes you come out smiling! Really, really nice. Write some more! :-)
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From: Benquasha Fraser
Date: 10/25/2006 |
Awww. I loved it. I'm so glad you directed us over here. :)
"It was like getting run over by a clown. Yeah, it hurts, but it's just so damned funny that you can't help but laugh as you bleed out on the pavement."
That was sooo funny I couldn't help but laugh at the image... ok, maybe I haven't quite stopped laughing about it just yet. Lol.
So, yeah. Just thought I'd say I loved your story. It was so sweet and perfect and I love happy endings. :D
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From: Damia Marsters (damiamarsters@hotmail.com)
Date: 10/22/2006 |
I really enjoyed reading this piece. It was a lovely quiet story with Ray's voice done so well. My favourite bit was -
"It was like getting run over by a clown. Yeah, it hurts, but it's just so damned funny that you can't help but laugh as you bleed out on the pavement."
I wish I had created that image!
I loved the last paragraph too.
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From: Sam (sam80853@gmail.com)
Date: 10/21/2006 |
Weehee ... that's great, SO them! Especially Ray's thoughts!
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From: Luciferofthecircle (Luciferofthecircle@hotmail.com)
Date: 10/18/2006 |
This is lovely. It's very sweet and Ray's voice feels very authentic. The love that Ray feels for Fraser shines through in the writing. Nice!
Do you have a Live Journal? Because if you do you should post this on ds-noticeboard.
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From: Ranger1s
Date: 10/16/2006 |
Great last line! It's the perfect ending. Please continue to write.
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