From: Miss Diagnosis
Date: 01/20/2008 |
You wrote about one of the most powerful impact scenes I've ever witnessed on House. While your focus was on how it rocked House's neatly compartmentalized notion of life (lump of tissue), I don't think it would move him to tears unless there was something in his background that would trigger that reaction. Canon reaction was how he was litterly stunned to speechlessness...something that rarely happens to him. I agree it disturbs his vision of things, but I need the motivation of what caused the tears. I will never, ever forget that little hand reaching for his finger, and then House later sitting down in front of a mindless TV travelogue and reliving that moment. For a TV show that frequently scoffs at religion of any sort, I've often thought it was a scene that the pro-life movement could make great use of. I think you have the start of a really great story but I wouldn't trivialize it by turning it into just a reason for sex. Explore the emotional side of what's moved House...takes more thought, but there's a lot of potential there for good story-telling. Good luck and I enjoyed your choice of story content and it's start...Miss Diagnosis
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From: cad
Date: 10/10/2007 |
well, house crying seems awkward...but you should go on writing house-stuff, i think..
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From: Catrina
Date: 07/26/2007 |
Hmm...just read your note about how you want to continue this. I'm not sure you should skip that far ahead in the next part. Just continuing with the post-reassuring-cuddle scene you've got going here would be lovely. Just my thoughts.
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From: YuYuHakushoismyLIFE
Date: 05/06/2007 |
Oh please do continue this I want to know what happens :D
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From: anon
Date: 04/10/2007 |
hey! that was great, you should definitely continue this story.
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From: Ree
Date: 04/07/2007 |
I thought this was very well written, and just beautiful! This is your first House fic? I never would have guessed! Great job, and I'd love for you to continue!
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From: J L Blackstone
Date: 04/07/2007 |
Great beginning. I vote for writing more. House is one of the most difficult fandoms to write in but you seem to have Wilson's "voice" down. In fact I'd like to see more stories form his point of view than House.
Wilson is a more interesting character because he is already portrayed on the show as a more complex character who is the only friend of "House."
The appeal of the two for one another is what makes the show. Their relationship is the deeper more long standing one and the one I for one want to explore.
So good job.
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From: nem
Date: 04/05/2007 |
i thought it was really well done, even if it's not your best work. personally, i'd love to see their reactions to house breaking down...particularly if it involves sex! (=
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From: Ray
Date: 04/05/2007 |
This was well-written. I'm not sure about a sequel, but if there is one you should consider explaining why he's crying - especially as heavily as he is. Without an explanation, it's completely out of character, and therefore not entirely believable. I look forward to seeing more from you.
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